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:bulletgreen: My first collaboration with mademoiselle

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With her fantastic pic "From Dust"



English first : because I thought the poem directly in english. The french text is the translation from the original. That's why I have requested a critique, if someone is kind enough to tell me if its sound well, or not.

:music: "calm-dark" mood try this [link]
:music: "wrath-dark" mood try this [link]

*figueline n'ouvre surtout pas le second lien...
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:iconminidarkcalibur89:
Minidarkcalibur89 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
Joli !
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Professional Writer
merci !
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:iconnahuask:
Nahuask Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013
Résurrection de l'ombre
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Professional Writer
:heart:
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:iconstolvezen:
Stolvezen Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Je ne puis résister aux charmes enténébrés de ces mots :heart:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Professional Writer
merci beaucoup :rose:
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:iconstolvezen:
Stolvezen Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
C'est toujours un plaisir :hug:
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:iconthatfunnierpiece:
ThatFunnierPiece Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
I can't help but ponder on the meaning, and realistically so. Crushing the clarity of winter, birth from the dust - it reminds me of rebirth, yet then there are "dusk's shadows", something reminiscent of an end. Or is it birth of - something akin to winter solstice, or coldest days?
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Professional Writer
free interpretation - for me, it came from the pic. As a forgotten goddess... Thank you!
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:iconshehrozeameen:
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:clap: you sir... are amazing!

Bien! magnifique!!
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Merci ! :sun:
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:iconshehrozeameen:
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
De Rein!
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:iconmeggie272:
Meggie272 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely and scary, especially in combination with the music :D
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
thank you !
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Shades-Of-Lethe Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wonderful! I adore the dark imagery and the melodic flow!! :heart:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
:heart:
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Delice1941 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
I like the simplicity of this piece, nice:rose:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
nice, thank you delice.
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Ninefiftin Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:...
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
:heart:
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:iconastrangeallure:
astrangeallure Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely collaboration...thinking in English now? :D Loved the first link, beautiful...the second, made me want to drive fast and throw things...or at least body slam someone. :lol:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Professional Writer
:lol: - Just a try, for training - I imagined a sort of goddess of dust, seeing this pic. I can "think" in english one or two lines - It's purely theoretical (I should practice the language "in vivo", not with scriptural founds - but I caznnot for the moment :D

Thank you :rose:
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:iconastrangeallure:
astrangeallure Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, just call me, Frantz, and I'll immerse in English. Here are my digits:

Highlight for the number. :rofl:

You are very welcome. :heart:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
:rofl:
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:iconastrangeallure:
astrangeallure Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That made no sense...I am ridiculous. :laughing:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
it's just perfect. Call the monty python now :lol:
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:iconastrangeallure:
astrangeallure Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D :rose:
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Professional Writer
Fantastic Collab Frantz... :clap:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Professional Writer
merci david :)
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:icondragonschest:
DragonsChest Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Very Welcome Frantz... :w00t:
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:icondameodessastock:
DameOdessaStock Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Magnifique :wow:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Professional Writer
:rose: merci :heart:
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Azaleos Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
A picture and a poetry that are so calm, on the surface, unveiling in the same time a non-innocence that breeds and sneaks inside, knocking the skin. The snake is rolling out through the veins.
The songs fit very well the atmosphere. Can't stop to gaze, read and listen to this work.
Thanks to both of you, great artists.
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Professional Writer
:blackrose:
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:iconpascal-prevost:
pascal-prevost Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
And so our story begins...
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Professional Writer
:)
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:iconinextremiss:
Inextremiss Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Photographer
Thank you very much for your beautiful words Frantz! :blackrose: :iconblackheartplz:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks to you :blackrose:
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666Bruno Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
'tain, c'est super...
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Professional Writer
merci !
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:iconwordeea:
wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
joli !!!

t'as pris radiance finalement ... ça sonne. excellent mix texte-image-musique. j'aime beaucoup le tout. ça rentre dedans. belle présentation aussi.
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Professional Writer
merci ! mais je viens de remettre clarity... rhaaa je ne sais pas lequel choisir :lol:
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:iconwordeea:
wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
garde clarity :rose:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Professional Writer
mon intuition était la bonne cool :D -

Note : ( crush clarity ) - mais si ça marche à la lecture en français, je ne suis pas sûr en français.
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:iconwordeea:
wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ceci dit, métaphoriquement parlant , c'est joli ...
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:iconwordeea:
wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
le seul bémol à "clarity" en anglais, c'est pas tout à fait le même sens ... (c'est pas clarté = lumière ... )
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Professional Writer
c'est clarté générale, j'ai vu sur le thesaurus. Ce qui est mieux, car cela prend un autre sens si on pense à Mallarmé :

"l'hiver saison de l'art lucide" ;p
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:iconwordeea:
wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
exactement ! (voir mon plus récent comm) ok. bon. ouf. j'avais vu juste aussi :D
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:iconwordeea:
wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
si, ça marche, c'est une des raison que je préfère ce terme ;)
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Professional Writer
... "pas sûr en anglais", donc... :skull: - merci
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